英语写作指导之如何写出得分的“亮点”

　　英语作文如何才能得高分呢?以下几种手段是增加句子复杂性的常见方法,也是得高分的“亮点”。

　　1. 改变句子的开头方式,不是一味地都是主语开头,接着是谓语、宾语,最后再加一个状语。可以把状语置于句首,或用分词作状语等。试比较:

　　(原文) My brother and I went to the cinema by bicycle the other day.

　　(修正) The other day my brother and I went to the cinema by bicycle.

　　(原文) The young man couldn’t help crying when he heard the bad news.

　　(修正) Hearing the bad news, the young man couldn’t help crying.

　　2. 在整篇文章中,避免只使用一两个句式,要灵活运用诸如强调句、主从复合句、分词短语、倒装句、省略句等。例如:

　　(1)强调句

　　(原文) The dog has saved my little sister bravely.

　　(修正) It is the dog that has saved my little sister bravely.

　　(2)主从复合句

　　(原文) We had to stand there to catch the offender.

　　(修正) What we had to do was to stand there, trying to catch the offender.

　　(3)分词短语、由with或without引导的短语

　　(原文) The driver escaped and didn’t stop, he left the old man lying on the road.

　　(修正) The driver escaped without stopping, leaving the old man lying on the road.

　　(4)倒装句

　　(原文) I went to bed at 11:30.

　　(修正) Not until 11:30 did I go to bed.

　　(5)省略句

　　(原文) While you are crossing the street, you should be careful.

　　(修正) While crossing the street, you should be careful.

　　3. 通过分句和合句,增强句子的连贯性和表现力。例如:

　　(原文) He stopped us an hour ago. He made us catch the next offender.

　　(修正) He stopped us half an hour ago and made us catch the next offender.

　　(原文) We had a short rest. Then we began to play happily. We sang and danced.

　　(修正) After a short rest, we had great fun singing and dancing.

　　4. 注意连接词与句子的运用。

　　以2001年高考作文为例,在信的开头,可加上“You want to know something about what is going on in schools in China?”这句话起承上启下的作用,使文章过渡自然;再如,用“What was worse?”引出减负前,晚上还要做作业,就寝时间11:30等要点。又如,“Now I have more free time...” 可引出减负后的情况。另外,在信的结尾,可用“How about you? I’m looking forward to hearing from you.”来自然地结束这封信。

　　5. 使用过渡词语。

　　写好了每个句子,并不一定就是一篇好文章,因为作为一篇文章,还必须行文连贯。那么,如何使文章行文连贯呢?这就要求我们在组成篇章时,要用好过渡性词语,过渡性词语就像是我们组装机械时使用的润滑剂一样,起着润滑的作用。常用的过渡词语主要有:

　　并列递进:and, also, as well as, besides, what’s more, furthermore, moreover, etc.

　　转折:but, yet, however, although, nevertheless, in spite of, after all, etc.

　　因果:because, as, for, since, for this reason, because of, so, therefore, thus, as a result, etc.

　　对比:or, otherwise, like, unlike, on the contrary, while, on the other hand, instead of, etc.

　　总结:in all, in brief, on the whole, in short, in general, in one word, etc.

　　总之,要使文章的层次高,可读性强,考生应增加些较高级的词汇与复杂的结构,并运用恰当的连接词和复合句,只有这样,才能在考试中取得理想的成绩。